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Saturday, May 30, 2009

Reader/Writer Tidbits -- May 30, 2009

Happy Birthday, Leslie! (My niece who is my same age. Sometimes we felt like two peas in a pod growing up, especially when my mother and my sister (her mother) dressed us like twins. Then, there were our kindergarten teachers who walked us to the middle of the hallway from classrooms at opposite ends so we could "say hello". Duh?!)

BookExpo America 2009 is underway in NYC! This is more of a tradeshow for booksellers and publishing industry types than a than a conference for readers or writers, but there's something for everyone. If you're in the vicinity, stop by the Jacob Javitts Center.

Ever heard of this one? SoCNoC It's pronounced "Sock-Nock", the Southern Cross Novel Challenge, hosted by a writers group out of New Zealand, the Kiwi Writers. This month's write 1k words per day didn't go so well. Too many distractions -- birthdays, school end-of-year events, weekends away, holidays... Know of anything significant going on in June? Other than an end of the month trip, I don't, so I think I have a better shot at remaining focused with this one. I'm going to use it to try to practice writing tight, consistent feedback I got from my contest judges. Do I need a challenge to write? No, but it helps. Gives me a target to shoot for, with some degree of accountability to others.

Is this such a thing as one too many posts on publishing royalties? Nahhh, not if by the time you actually get a royalty check, you'll be a pro in understanding why you got what you got. Here's one more.

Literary agent Nathan Bransford blogged about taking a chance on a young agent.

And another tidbit that comes from Mr. Bransford, author Cynthia posts "Cynsational News & Giveaways, a weekly roundup of publishing news and book giveaways.

Agent Chip MacGregor (doesn't that make him sound like some sort of spy?) gets to the nitty-gritty in plain English (as he always does) on the Google Book Settlement.

Romance University? A blog about all things writing romance. This one still seems to be getting underway, but it looks like it will be fun and informative.

Peace & Blessings,
Patricia
Tampa Bay Writing Examiner

Stay focused. Be deliberate. Believe.

Peace & Blessings,
Patricia

Stay focused. Be deliberate. Believe.

Friday, May 29, 2009

The Genesis Feedback...and Final Thoughts

I finally read my Genesis feedback. This entry was my current wip, or what was my current wip when it was still an ensemble story.

As you might expect, there were some similarities and some differences from my Touched by Love Feedback. One of the similarities, I didn't mention previously, was that all six judges instructed me to forget about using underlining for italics. Apparently that holdover from the pre-digitalization days is now passe. I tend to use Courier New, which I find easiest on the eyes, but the italics look terrible. Guess I'll make the switch to the Tms New Roman font and begin using italicized font.

That was easy.

Other positive similarities were "easy to read style", "good show vs. tell", and "good description". Similar negatives were "wordiness", "need stronger initial hook", and "more dialogue".

Having now considered both sets of contest feedback, my top 3 craft issues are:
  1. Writing succinct
  2. Stronger hooks
  3. More dialogue, less introspection/narrative
An unexpected product of entering these contests was the encouragement I received. In each set of feedback, at least one judge took the time not only to critique my entry, but also to pen specific words of encouragement.

From my Touched By Love judge:
...I highly recommend you start another story if this is done...A writer grows with each new book and each of us learns so much from that experience...Have fun with your writing and your growth...I’d also suggest you read Debbie Macomber’s book called Knit Together. It’s a work of encouragement for the life you want.
From my Genesis judge:
When I read the synopsis, I said, "Wow, that's quite a story!"...I love the concept...It's hard to learn to be succinct, but not impossible. You obviously have been working on your craft and have good things to say. Please don't give up, because yours is a voice that should be heard. Keep working on removing the dross and refining the gold of your prose.
I really appreciate this kind of encouragement. This is what unpublished writers hope for when entering contests like these. They made entering all the more worthwhile.

Finally, a few comments cast an interesting spotlight on the cultural divide between the mostly Caucasian contest judges and entrants who either are or create characters from another ethnicity.

In a wedding scene, I had a pastor instruct the groom to "salute" his bride. That's a very common phrasing used in the African-American community, which simply means it's time to kiss. One judge said she didn't realize it was military funeral.

Another judge asked whether I was targeting an "urban" line. In my synopsis, I indicated that the heroine looking for Mr. Right seeks help from the hero, a friend who offers dating advice. She connects with his very suave, charismatic friend--who later turns out to be a louse. When she does, the hero realizes he wants her for himself. It's an inspirational so there's no sex involved, but the judge said this type of plot is not "traditional".

Then one judge said my dialogue sounded "unnatural" based on one girlfriend offering a ride to her friend who has been stood up, in this manner: "Renee, does this mean you’re bumming a ride? You can ride with Del and me." Uhhh...maybe, but I don't see or hear anything unnatural. Do you? It might have been better to pose the question rather than assume the line needed to be fixed.

Fear of these kinds of comments make some AA writers shy away from writing contests, but I think multicultural writers must take them in context. I understand that most--not all-- of the judges are coming from a different place than me, in terms of cultural background and community. They meant well, and intended no offense.

As I said before, their feedback is not cast in stone. Nothing requires me to change one iota of my story. So I wasn't put off at all. Actually, a bit tickled, a response helped no doubt by putting time between receiving the feedback and looking at it.

That's it. Enough about contest feedback, and back to writing.

Peace & Blessings,
Patricia
Tampa Bay Writing Examiner

Stay focused. Be deliberate. Believe.

Peace & Blessings,
Patricia

Stay focused. Be deliberate. Believe.

Wednesday, May 27, 2009

Encouragement and Criticism from TBL Judges

I usually save my tidbits for the weekend, but this one is good to hold. Authors Brenda Jackson and Rochelle Alers have inked significant, extended contracts with Harlequin and African-American romance will now be tracked as a separate sub-genre. The NY Daily News reports "African American Romance Writers Come Into Their Own".

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I wanted to share some of the feedback I got from the Touched By Love Judges. Overall, I was very pleased with my scores and the feedback I was given. Some of their comments encouraged me and lifted my spirits. Others opened a window into ways I could get better as a writer. Still others affirmed things about my writing I already knew and loved.

The Top 3 Things The Judges Liked:
  1. Description -- All called my description "nice" and one said I had talent in this area.

  2. Voice -- "Nice, engaging style", "great voice", and "love your voice".

  3. Faith Thread -- Not a lot of comments here but they all gave me high marks in this area.
Fists pumped in the air. Happy dancing. But...

The Top 3 Things the Judges Didn't Like:
  1. Hooks -- Need to strengthen; every chapter should begin and end with one (Arrrgh! Thought I did all right here. Back to the drawing board.)

  2. Sentence Structure -- Too long at times, awkward, overwriting, "less is more" (No surprise here. You loyal blog readers see this all the time. LOL! A bad habit I'm working hard to lose.)

  3. Pacing -- Tighten up; story needs more energy; introduce conflict quicker (I agree. This is something I would work hard on in revision.)
Unanimously, the judges thought I should drop chapter one and begin with chapter two. I couldn't help but laugh. They're right. In fact, chapter two was my original chapter one. I think I do my best writing when I just let myself write, and don't think about whether I'm following the rules or whether agents/editors will like it.

Now here's the stuff they said that makes writers screwy:
  • One judge thought I nailed "show, don't tell". Another thought I had too much telling, not enough showing.

  • One judge said my story sounded like romantic comedy but then because of a plot twist outlined in the synopsis, she feared it would be "too dark". Another said she thought it might be romance, but it read like women's fiction.

  • One didn't like my heroine, saying she "didn't connect with the character". Another loved my heroine.

  • Although all the judges agreed I should speed up the pace of the story, one said I had "a lot places" where I could insert additional sensory detail.

  • One said my dialogue was strong and sounded very natural. Another said my dialogue didn't sound natural at all.

  • One said my story had the potential to be a "fun and heart-warming read". Another said the plot was "ordinary".
Can you see me scratching my head? What's a writer to do?

But you know what? They weren't right or wrong, and they're not supposed to be. They are simply providing their best input, and I appreciate all of the comments.

I am encouraged by the things they liked, and generally agree with the things they didn't like as a whole. The rest? Well, I had concerns about a few of those things myself, like pacing, so that's okay. The others I'll worry about when the feedback becomes unanimous.

It will be interesting to see how much commonality there is with the Genesis feedback, which was a wholly different story.

Thoughts?

Peace & Blessings,
Patricia
Tampa Bay Writing Examiner

Stay focused. Be deliberate. Believe.

Peace & Blessings,
Patricia

Stay focused. Be deliberate. Believe.

Tuesday, May 26, 2009

About Those Contest Scores...

So, yes, I finally took a look at those dreaded contest scores over the weekend.

Half of them anyway. One out of two contests.

Patience...

As I read blog posts and comments by other writers, I'm amazed by how intense this whole contest thing is for all involved. Entrants anguish over waiting, then over the feedback received while judges alternate between consoling non-finalists and defending their decisions.

I get it, but it still blows me away.

There is definitely method to this contest feedback madness. Here's my prescription for handling contest feedback:
  1. Ignore the contest calendar. My feedback kind of snuck up on me. I didn't dwell on it for weeks, like some entrants. Purposefully. Could have checked any time but didn't. Easier on my mental health that way.

  2. Acknowledge the feedback. Both my entries were via email, so I got my responses via email. I replied to let the coordinators know I received my feedback.

  3. Ignore the feedback. I congratulated the finalists, but I ignored my feedback until I knew I was ready to handle it. Didn't even open the score sheets for a few days.

  4. Peek. (Because who can really be 100% nonchalant about these things?) Just enough to get a general sense. Saw some things I liked, and some I didn't.

  5. Wait some more. For me, more than a week. Nearly two. Not saying that much time is needed but it worked out that way. What I was really doing was waiting until the any angst had passed. Almost until it felt like old news, and I felt I could receive the feedback objectively.

  6. Re-read entry. Needed to reacquaint myself with what the judges saw, especially since I had feedback for two contests. But I think this is important for every contest. Time has passed, and I didn't remember it exactly as it was.

  7. Review feedback in detail, and take notes. I sat down, with pen and paper, and went through my entry, making a list of the feedback given by each judge. Patterns began to emerge, and I can now reflect on the feedback away from my precious entry.

  8. Exhale.
I'm happy with my results. I didn't get crazy, and I got some good feedback. I didn't agree with everything, but I could see the judges' point. Some of the feedback confirmed what I already knew. Some pointed out weaknesses I hadn't realized while other comments affirmed my writing in ways that made me smile.

I'll keep writing, and work on a game plan to improve my craft.

Tomorrow, I'll share some of my feedback.

Peace & Blessings,
Patricia
Tampa Bay Writing Examiner

Stay focused. Be deliberate. Believe.

Peace & Blessings,
Patricia

Stay focused. Be deliberate. Believe.

Monday, May 25, 2009

Do Contest Scores Measure Writing Ability?

Author Jody Hedlund made this comment on my recent post explaining why I hadn't looked at my contest feedback even after a few days.

"I'm grateful for the push the contest is giving to my career, but I honestly don't think it's the true measure of how well we write because I think there are a ton of great writers out there who missed finaling, who are every bit as good as those who did final."

Jody, I agree.

I definitely think finaling is a function of who your judges are. The use of three judges is an attempt to balance the scores, but it's believed that unpubbed judges are harder on entries than published authors, who've been around the bend a few times and know what really matters. (Who did an blog on this recently?) So if your entry was judged by one pubbed author and two unpubbed, and my entry by three pubbed authors, might I get higher scores? I don't know.

The way I see it finaling is also a function of (1) who else entered your category; (2) how many people overall entered your category; and (3) whether the judges get your voice. The exact same entry could just miss finaling one year, and come out on top the very next. Of course, and not to be in anyway diminished, is the need for writers to demonstrate substantial writing craft. At least I hope "substantial" is what's required.

So, no, contest scores are not an absolute or true measure of one's writing ability, in my opinion. In fact, I never thought of them that way. I wanted the feedback (and to win, if possible), and I also wanted to get my entries in front of industry folks who might be an encouragement/boost to my writing career. I got both of those things.

But, they are a measure. I think the contest judges overall do their very best to provide objective, substantive feedback, at least for the two I entered, the Genesis and the Touched By Love contests.

Many writers do not have critique partners or readers to give them feedback, but will enter contests. Others have cps, but are wondering whether they're at the point of moving their writing to the next level (getting an agent, submitting, etc.) Contests are one way of getting a read on where a writer is. Not the only way or the absolute way, but one way.

I'll go into my specific contest feedback a bit more in another post. There are definitely some things I can work on, and I appreciate them being called out for me.

BTW, Jody double-finaled in the Genesis historical category this year. Go, Jody!!!

To all the finalists in every writing contest, I congratulate you on your efforts, and wish you continued success. Jody, I'm pulling for you. It would be great, years from now, to be able to say, "I knew her when..."

Happy Memorial Day!

Peace & Blessings,
Patricia
Tampa Bay Writing Examiner

Stay focused. Be deliberate. Believe.

Peace & Blessings,
Patricia

Stay focused. Be deliberate. Believe.

Saturday, May 23, 2009

Reader/Writer Tidbits -- May 23, 2009

Lots of tips this week, some carryover from last week and a couple of new finds:

Trying to find another way to express your character's emotions through body language? Use The Body Language Cheat Sheet

The Christian Writer's Guild is offering new shorter, more affordable course: Articles That Sell. This one is a six-month, 12 lesson course to help you quickly begin to write and sell those articles burning inside of you.

Cyndi Myers reports on the recent Book Industry Study Group's Making Information Pay conference, where Jim King, senior v-p and general manager of Nielsen BookScan reported the following:

Sales of adult fiction rose 8.9% during the past five years. General
fiction went up 23.3%, graphic novels rose 52.7%, mystery and detective titles
declined 12.7%, literary fiction rose 86.1%, historical fiction up 24.1% and
political fiction up 157.7%.

In the first quarter of 2009, sales of religious fiction rose 68.53%,
thrillers were up 27.9%, general fiction declined 3.4%, romance has risen 1.5%,
and mystery/detective tumbled 19.8%. Children's book sales rose almost 9%
in the quarter.

Cyndi also reports that as of July 2009, Steeple Hill Books is discontinuing its single title program. Steeple Hill will continue to publish Love Inspired category inspirational romance. (FYI: The contemporary line is expanding from four to six books per month beginning in June.)

And for all the writers, new and experienced, help to make sure you've shed all your unrealistic expectations about the writing life. Deatri King-Bey (and her commenters) highlight them in technicolor.

Have a wonderful holiday weekend!

Peace & Blessings,
Patricia
Tampa Bay Writing Examiner

Stay focused. Be deliberate. Believe.

Peace & Blessings,
Patricia

Stay focused. Be deliberate. Believe.

Friday, May 22, 2009

Touched By Love Too?!

Yesterday I posted over at Romancing The Blog: What I'd Really Like to See in Romance. My post went up late because I edited it to make a teensy, weensy change after scheduling it. Didn't post as expected, and I didn't realize it until late in the afternoon. Check it out if you have a moment.

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So I've let another day go by without reading my Genesis feedback. Am I afraid?

No.

Uh, maybe a little.

Because I naturally thought my darling was just the most beautiful baby one might ever read. (Not really, but I did think it was pretty good. If I didn't, why enter?)

I know I have to face the music sometime. I'm thinking this is going to be a weekend thing, especially now that I've also received my Touched By Love contest feedback.

Again, I did not final.

But, again, I got feedback. And truly that's the benefit of entering contests. For a low price, you can get feedback from published authors, an editor, or an agent. (These contests use unpubbed authors too, as I've judged a few myself, but that doesn't mean the feedback is any less valuable.)

Sure, it would have been great to final. Even better to win. One of the two. A HUGE boost in the writing confidence arm.

I kind of got that anyway just by entering. Another rung on the journey to publication ladder. (This ladder is horizontal, neither up nor down, and sprouts new, unexpected paths all the time.)

Apparently my stuff wasn't too bad. My score sheets tell me my writing doesn't stink. Kinda knew that, but it's nice to hear.

And, the detailed feedback points out things I can do to make it better.

I won't agree with everything said. For example, my story has African-American characters. Educated, middle class folks. Yet, they don't necessarily always use "the King's English". 'Cuz we don't. (See how I threw that slang in there?) It's just how we speak. Not all the time nor in every situation. But we do.

My characters speak like me and my friends and family. But one judge said the dialogue didn't sound real. Not real? Probably not where she lives, works, and hangs out. And that's okay. This is one of those things I know I won't change based on feedback. Not unless everyone who ever reads my writing says the same thing. And others haven't. In fact, the other judges gave me high scores on dialogue.

So, this holiday weekend, I'll find some time to hunker down with my contest entries and my feedback--have to read the ms first to refresh my memory as to exactly what the judges were judging--and absorb the feedback.

Should be interesting. Hope to glean a lot of useful stuff.

Oh, and a BIG congratulations to the 2009 Touched By Love finalists:
Historical
Susanne Dietze
Lisa Karon Richardson
Dina Sleiman

Long Contemporary
Kara Bonnevie
Ann Lee Miller
Denice Stewart

Short Contemporary
Tamara Cooper
Wenda Dottridge
Niki Turner

As an aside, have you been enjoying this week's Virtual Writer's Conference? It's a cornucopia of writing-related workshops, all free and online.

Peace & Blessings,
Patricia
Tampa Bay Writing Examiner

Stay focused. Be deliberate. Believe.

Peace & Blessings,
Patricia

Stay focused. Be deliberate. Believe.

Thursday, May 21, 2009

I'm Dead???...Genesis Feedback

Okay, so the first thing I learned on Facebook, from two former classmates, is that I'm dead.

WHAT???

That's right. Apparently there has been an ugly rumor spreading about my, ahem, demise. See why it's important to attend one's high school reunions?

I'm still laughing over that one.

Got my Genesis feedback. Three days ago. Haven't looked yet.

Yes, I'm anxious to see what the feedback is, but I have to do this when I know I'll be most receptive to the feedback. Not when I'm breezing thru email or when I'm dog tired, as I was last night. No, I need to be rested and ready to see what the judges had to say.

It will take a couple of reads. The first pass is just to see what was said, and react. The second is when I'll consider what was said, and see how I can learn from it.

Maybe tonight. Snug in my pajamas, with some dark chocolate in hand.

As I was writing this, I was also printing everything out. Out of 100 points, I scored 73, 76, and 78. Not bad. Hoped for better. No idea what a finalist in my category scored so don't know where these marks put me in the bigger picture.

I snuck a peak at the comments. (You knew I would, didn't you?) At first glance, the judges seemed to like--and dislike--different things. Need to read the feedback in more detail. The nice thing is that there is a LOT of detail. If everyone got the same level of feedback, the Genesis judges worked hard to give the writers something we could sink our teeth into and use to improve our writing.

After I've had time to read, digest, and reflect on the feedback, I'll say more.

I can tell you that I'm already planning to enter next year's contest. The perfectionist in me wants to see whether I can raise my scores. What do you think?

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Author Diana Peterfreund has a fun contest on her blog to promote another author's debut novel (Dull Boy by Sarah Cross). You get to make yourself into a super hero. I'm Whipped Lash.



No jokes, please. ;>)

Peace & Blessings,
Patricia
Tampa Bay Writing Examiner

Stay focused. Be deliberate. Believe.

Peace & Blessings,
Patricia

Stay focused. Be deliberate. Believe.

Wednesday, May 20, 2009

Featured Book: Ulterior Motives by Mark Andrew Olsen

Happy Birthday, Big Brother! And belated happy b-day to my sister-in-law, who celebrated hers yesterday. More May birthdays to come!

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I read today's featured book, Ulterior Motives, over the weekend. If you like action-packed political or military thrillers, this one is for you. It leaps right into the middle of today's big issues--the war on Iraq, torture of prisoners, integrity of politicians--and touches on many familiar others, including divorce, parenting, women in leadership, relevance of evangelical Christianity, etc. The story keeps coming at you, fast and furious, with the pressure mounting for resolution.

As soon as I was done, I handed it off to my 14yo to add to his summer reading list. This is just the kind of book he'll enjoy when he's away at basketball camp and needs a mental break, or...at home, and needs a mental break from his little brothers.


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This week, the

Christian Fiction Blog Alliance

is introducing

Ulterior Motive

Bethany House (March 1, 2009)

by

Mark Andrew Olsen



ABOUT THE AUTHOR:

MARK ANDREW OLSEN whose novel The Assignment was a Christy Award finalist, also collaborated on bestsellers Hadassah (now the major motion picture: One Night With the King), The Hadassah Covenant, and Rescued. Two of his last books were the supernatural thriller The Watchers, and The Warriors.

The son of missionaries to France, Mark is a Professional Writing graduate of Baylor University. He and his wife, Connie, live in Colorado Springs with their three children.


ABOUT THE BOOK

When an al-Qaeda email is intercepted, threatening an attack on America, it leads to the capture of the group's leader. Yet even under fierce interrogation, the terrorist clings to his jihadist beliefs and refuses to divulge any information. Desperate, the Army resorts to extreme measures--a controversial protocol designed to break a subject's resistance. But the attempt must be masked as an offer of clemency and rely on an outside party, someone who is unaware of the protocol's aims.

They find that someone in Greg Cahill, a disgraced soldier who now serves in a prison ministry. Lured by the chance to restore his reputation, Greg befriends a man the entire country despises. And the result proves combustible, the two men having to flee for their lives. With both in need of redemption, they set out to prevent a major catastrophe...

If you would like to read the first chapter of Ulterior Motive, go HERE

Peace & Blessings,
Patricia
Tampa Bay Writing Examiner

Stay focused. Be deliberate. Believe.

Peace & Blessings,
Patricia

Stay focused. Be deliberate. Believe.

Sunday, May 17, 2009

Reader/Writer Tidbits -- May 17, 2009

I had so many tips this week, and yesterday's post for Marilynn Griffith's Mom's The Word, I hope you don't mind if I put up half today. I've saving the rest for next weekend.

Write Integrity Editorial Services is offering online writing courses for writers in the Christian market. Registration is underway for the first course, which will begin June 1st. Plot Shots: Plotting Your Novel in 12 Easy Snapshots, is an eight-week course taught by Janice Thompson (who also writes as Janice Hanna.) Plot Shots gives non-plotters an opportunity to lay out their stories in a simple yet creative way.

In two weeks, the Great Escape Summer Reading Contest will begin, and run for 22 days. Looking for a great Christian book read for the summer? Enter and win.

Per SF writer Jeremiah Tolbert, 5 lies writers believe about editors.

Another list of five: 5 Easy Tips to Strengthen Your Scenes from Writer's Digest.

Have a promising self-published title, based on sales data and customer feedback? Amazon's new publishing venture, AmazonEncore, might be interested.

Want your blog on Amazon Kindle? Well, now you can provide content for Kindle and get paid for it too. Read here.

Be Blessed!!!

Peace & Blessings,
Patricia
Tampa Bay Writing Examiner

Stay focused. Be deliberate. Believe.

Peace & Blessings,
Patricia

Stay focused. Be deliberate. Believe.

Saturday, May 16, 2009

Featured Book: Mom's The Word by Marilynn Griffith

First, Happy Birthday to my oldest baby boy! (They will always be my "baby" boys.) Love you much, and proud of all you've accomplished this year: Jr Honor Society induction, Outstanding Middle School Athlete, JV Basketball Defensive Award, 200m state track record, but most of all...your continued maturation while remaining boyish, loving, and loads of fun!


Now, on to Marilynn's book...

Always read a Marilynn Griffith book with an open mind. It's like someone taking you by the hand for what you believe will be a breezy walk by the lake. You will get around the lake, but the journey will bend and twist in ways you never expected, and you'll be the richer for it in the end.

I've been following the Tywebbin blog tour for this book. I think I read every single post, and commented on most. I feel a bit like a cyberstalker, but that's the purpose of a blog tour, right? Marilynn has a witty, battle-tested wisdom that shines through in every guest post or interview. So each day, I wanted to see what she might say next. And every day I was as touched, as when I read her book. Get this one. You'll be glad you did.

It is time for a FIRST Wild Card Tour book review! If you wish to join the FIRST blog alliance, just click the button. We are a group of reviewers who tour Christian books. A Wild Card post includes a brief bio of the author and a full chapter from each book toured. The reason it is called a FIRST Wild Card Tour is that you never know if the book will be fiction, non~fiction, for young, or for old...or for somewhere in between! Enjoy your free peek into the book!

You never know when I might play a wild card on you!


Today's Wild Card author is:


and the book:


Mom's the Word

Steeple Hill (January 1, 2009)


ABOUT THE AUTHOR:



Marilynn Griffith is the author of eight novels, mother to seven children, wife to a deacon and proof of God’s enduring mercy. She has served as national Vice President of American Christian Fiction Writers and has served on faculty at several national writers conferences. When she’s not writing about friendship, family and faith, Marilynn blogs and speaks to women and writers.

Visit the author's website.

Product Details:

List Price: $6.99
Mass Market Paperback: 288 pages
Publisher: Steeple Hill (January 1, 2009)
Language: English
ISBN-10: 0373786417
ISBN-13: 978-0373786411

AND NOW...THE FIRST CHAPTER:


THEY COME SOFTLY


They come softly, like the kiss of

newborn skin. Words, brushing my

Heels as I head for the kitchen, bruising my

Heart as life reaches for my hand.


Stirring the morning against my

Belly, I listen as they sift through my

Fingers, stories I’ve never heard,

Places I’ve never known.


Pouring into the pitcher of my

Day, they blow by. I open my

Hand, trying to catch a phrase,

To hold what cannot be held.


Love beckons, Purpose calls,

Drowning out the whisper words

Skating, out of place like fall leaves

Across the summer of my soul.


Truth swallows Hope, drowns the

Words. I squint against the glare

Of throaty screams and scarred

Earth, listening, wondering

If they’ll ever come again.


--Karol,

the morning the new neighbors moved in








CHAPTER ONE


“They’re ruining everything.” The words tangled in Karol Simon’s throat.

She watched in horror as a backhoe bit into the tree house she and her family had constructed with their former neighbors and best friends Hope and Singh. The rest of the yard, including Hope’s prize-winning roses and the strawberry bush the children had planted, lay in heaped mounds of roots and blooms.

To Karol, it looked a lot like her life.

Her tears, few at first, now streamed down her face as she watched butterflies and birds flee into her yard to escape the destruction of their homes and so many of Karol’s memories. She wanted to run to her husband, to collapse into his arms . . . Instead, she pulled the curtain back further, using it to wipe her tears.

“It looks like a cemetery,” she said without turning around, certain Rob wasn’t listening.

He was. “Get away from the window, Kay. It’s rude for one thing. It’s depressing for another. Do you think I don’t know how much you miss Hope? I miss Singh too. But the Lord led them to another place, to another job, to other—”

She held up a hand. “Don’t say it.”

“I will say it. To other friends. Hope and Singh are going to find new friends. A new church. A new life in North Carolina. That doesn’t mean they’ll forget us here in Tallahassee. It’s just a chance to share them with someone else.”

Rob laid aside his Linux Pocket Guide and stood. Four strides brought him to the window. His weekend work boots struck the floor with the same confidence she heard in his voice. Not so long ago, Karol had heard the same assurance in her own voice.

Was she the same woman who’d once run Vacation Bible School and the women’s ministry committee? These days the only running she did was from herself . . . and from God. She’d expected to miss Hope, to be sad for a little while, but this was more than that.

Karol needed her.

She hadn’t realized how much her friend helped her be a good mom, a good wife. Hope had a houseful of children, seven in all, and taught her children at home. She’d taught Karol a lot about being a mother and being a friend.

Now that the crew next door had moved away though, Karol couldn’t just pick up the phone and call. Their busy schooling schedule had been easier to interrupt when it only meant walking next door and waiting for a break in the action. Now when Karol called, she got the answering machine indicating the family’s school hours.

In the evenings, Hope was tired with moving in at first and then Karol started to unravel and didn’t want to call and detail her failures. She called her friend less and less these days and seemed to lose it more and more. And her husband was starting to notice.

That was the part that made her heart pound as Rob took her hand. Her pulse quickened too, both in anticipation and fear. Things had grown awkward between them. Rusty. She wasn’t ready to deal with him quite yet, though Lemon Pledge and sawdust were a hard combination to ignore.

He knew it too. Rob stood close behind her, running his hands over hers until she released the curtain. He brushed away her last tear with his thumb before lacing his arms around her waist. She closed her eyes as his stubbled face prickled against her smooth one, waiting for the kiss that was sure to come. It’d be a soft one, right in the curve of her neck most likely. Even after three kids, he still knew how to buckle her knees.

He kissed her ear instead, first with his lips and then with a whisper. “I know this is hard, honey. We all knew it would be. I get up every morning and reach for the phone to call Singh to pray or to borrow a tool from him, only to realize he’s gone. I know it’s even deeper with you and Hope, but maybe God has a purpose in this, for us as well as them.

“We’ll see them soon enough. Charlotte isn’t that far away. They mentioned coming down for Ryan’s birthday, remember? And we’re taking Mia over for Mia’s party next month. Until then, I figure we can work on some things between us—you and I. For starters, I was thinking that maybe I could be your best friend again.”

Karol swallowed hard and closed her eyes, drinking in this closeness with her husband. There had been a time before, when Hope and Karol had been close, but she and Rob had been closer. He had been her world. Then storms came and shook their little marriage tree, blowing away some of blossoms, shaking off much of the fruit.

Hope had helped her push things down in the soil again, prayer by prayer, day by day. Now Karol would have to do that alone. Rob wanted to help, to be friends, but there were things that she used to tell Hope that she just couldn’t say to her husband. What would he do if he knew that sometimes she didn’t like her life or herself? What would he think if he knew that sometimes she just wanted to run away?

He’d think that you’re human, Karol. He is too.

When women from church had come to Karol for advice about their marriages, she’d reminded them that they’d married sinners, broken people who continued to need forgiveness once the honeymoon was over. It had all made so much sense to her back then, until the stitches on her own marriage had loosened. Before then, she’d never understood those couples who disappeared and showed up with other spouses, the ones who lived in the same houses but drove to service in separate cars.

Those were the couples who had once been friends with Karol and Rob, part of the couples ministry that had met at Hope and Singh’s. One by one, those couples had disappeared: divorced, separated, moved away… They had discovered, as Karol had, that family came at a cost, that love required effort.

Rob kissed the top of her ear again and tightened his hands around her. She rested back against him and wondered if he wasn’t trying to get her to hear him. To really listen. Sometimes that was so hard to do, even though Karol tried.

She was blessed to be this man’s wife, the mother of her children. And now here she was, coming undone over new neighbors. Once more, she lifted her hand to the curtains, a green gingham set Hope had taught her to make during the months after Mia was born, the summer of darkness. At the thought of those hard days, her worst postpartum depression ever, Karol let the fabric fall from her fingers. Nothing was worth going back there.

Her husband ran a hand through her hair. “I mean it. I want to be your best friend.”

She turned to face Rob, trying to ignore the creaking sound as the tree house toppled to the ground next door. Would these strangers burn the wood they’d all signed and decorated or should she go over and beg for it? No, it was their house now. She had to let it go. All of it.

Karol tried to laugh but it came out more like a groan. She punched Rob’s shoulder lightly, then squeezed it.

“You are my best friend, silly. You’re just not acting like it. Hope wouldn’t take their side against me.”

Rob’s dimples appeared but his eyes went dull. She’d chosen to stay on the surface of things, skimming across the hurt he wanted to dive into. He joined her in the chit chat with a reluctant smile. “Whose side? The new neighbors’? Or the kids’?”

“Both.” Karol stared at him, once again wondering how he’d ended up with her. He had a careless beauty about him, a bearing that made him look like a king in a pair of jeans. Three kids had moved her body parts to new zip codes and left her face looking more like her mother’s than she wanted to admit, but except for the sprinkles of gray in Rob’s beard, he looked the same as the day they’d wed. Unless you looked close at the years in his eyes, he didn’t look much different from the husband of the young couple who’d moved in next door. Was this how the two of them had seemed to Hope and Singh? She peered through the window again, trying to convince herself otherwise.

The woman, “Dianne with a y” as Hope called her, shouted over the noise for the men to dig up a shrub they’d missed. No, she and Rob hadn’t been quite like this. This was a new kind of crazy. And from the way things were going in Carol’s house, it must be contagious.

“The kids are definitely out of control. It seems like they’re screaming at me every minute now. Like they’ve totally forgotten how to communicate.”

Rob’s look conveyed his thoughts but he voiced them anyway. “Maybe we’ve forgotten how to communicate, Hon. Things have been hard lately. They lost their best friends too. There’s no one to play with. Naturally they’re going to be a little out of sync.”

Out of sync? “Judah tried to put Mia in the dryer yesterday, Rob. Ryan hid in the closet reading a book so that he didn’t have to deal with his siblings during the whole ordeal. When they found him, he shut them in there!

“They are more than out of sync. And don’t start with that ‘we’ve forgotten how to communicate’ stuff. I know what you really mean. You mean I’ve forgotten how to communicate.”

Rob scratched his head. “I didn’t mean that, but since you mentioned it—you have been screaming quite a bit lately. It seems like we’re going back in time. I have to catch myself. Yesterday, I almost started screaming too.”

Karol rolled her eyes. As if. “You did not.”

More dimples. “Okay, so I didn’t, but I thought about it. Anyway, I am on your side, both with the kids and with the neighbors. I just don’t think you’re seeing the big picture right now because you’re hurting over losing Hope. Singh got a good opportunity there. He prayed about it and chose, with Hope, to make this move. Don’t forget that. We will get through this. I’d rather come out of it with a good relationship with our kids…and our neighbors.”

Karol couldn’t help being stung by the truth in Rob’s words. The move had been unexpected, an near parallel offer for Singh with a possibility of advancement. A slim possibility. And yet, Hope hadn’t thought twice about leaving her behind.

was right, of course. Singh was her husband. Hope’s only contradiction had been the house. None of them had believed that it would sell—for so much and so quickly. It was a deal they couldn’t refuse. A God thing. And yet, Karol couldn’t help feeling as though someone had ripped the rug out from under her.

More like the security blanket.

“You want to have a good relationship with those two? Even if they’re insane? I mean look at them.” She pointed out the window. ”They’re so…so…”

Rob planted his chin on her shoulder. “What? Young?”

“Skinny!” Karol said, louder than she’d meant to. Was the window still cracked from airing out the living room after Mia’s pull-up explosion this morning? Surely not. Her husband chuckled and she laughed too, in spite of her efforts not to. “I’m serious. They’re skinny and young and weird and they have no kids.”

“We were skinny and young and weird and when we moved in next to Hope and Singh, Kay.”

“I was never skinny,” Karol said, taking a deep breath.

“Thank God,” her husband whispered, slipping a hand in her back pocket. “But I was definitely weird. Remember how I slammed the door on Singh that first time he came over?”

“Well, in your defense, not many people serenade their new neighbors…especially people who are tone deaf. If he’d just handed you the pie, things would have gone much smoother.”

Her words slowed as her new neighbor, dressed in a celery-colored suit and tangerine pumps, tripped over the wood pile Singh had kindly left behind. “Dianne with a y” stared down at the timber in confusion and shook her head before motioning for someone to cart it away.

Karol shook her head too. “Okay, so we were a little goofy at first, but these people are unbelievable. She looked at that wood pile like it was going to come alive and eat her. Surely she saw the woodstove when they bought the house. It’s one of the best features.”

Rob stroked her hair. “It’s not Hope’s house anymore. Let it go, Mom.”

Mom. It’d been funny when Rob first started calling her that, but now it’d worn thin. She’d started it first of course by calling Rob Dad, only to abandon it when he returned the favor. Where had she gotten that from anyway? She closed her eyes.

Hope and Singh.

It fit them. It didn’t fit Karol. She wanted, needed, a name again. “I’m trying, Rob.” His name rolled of her tongue before she could call it back, say it better. Say it like she used to, in the sweet, husky tone he loved. Instead, it came out nasal and high pitched, almost as piercing as the cry from upstairs.

He gave her a funny look and lifted his head as if he were going to ask her something before their youngest child and only girl Mia let out one of her signature siren screams.

“Mooooooooooooom!”

Karol pinched her eyes shut. Her four-year-old-going-on-fifty was either going to be an opera singer or a very good referee. Either way, naptime was over. Not that it had ever started really, but after little Mia’s poopy finger painting incident this morning and five-year-old Judah’s egg juggling at lunch (“I thought they were boiled!”), her three children, especially the oldest who only liked to encounter body fluids on the page of a book, had gladly escaped to their rooms.

Now they were up and ready to roll and she’d been too busy staring at the mess next door to get together an activity for them. After a morning of Saturday cartoons, Karol liked to keep the TV off in the afternoons. Until lately anyway.

Her oldest son, Ryan, must have been thinking the same thing because he switched off the TV and started reading his younger brother and sister a story. Though only few weeks shy of his eleventh birthday, Ryan had an old soul. His younger brother and sister drove him crazy and often interrupted the book he always seemed to be reading, but Ryan always knew what everyone needed—especially Karol. She mouthed a thank you to him. He replied with a curt nod, which meant she’d probably have to make it up to him with brownies.

Karol wrapped an arm around her husband’s, bare to the elbow and hairy as ever. Her mother called him Sasquatch. To his face. She was not always a kind woman. Karol thanked God that Rob was a kind man. Too kind sometimes. She pinched her eyes tight, shutting out her new neighbors, her old memories and the sound of her two youngest children tumbling down the stairs.

“I’ve got it, Mom.” Ryan said quietly, still holding the book as he collected the two gymnasts. “Keep talking. Nobody’s hurt.”

Karol was headed to check anyway, but Rob pulled her back. “Ryan wants to grow up a little. Let him. Besides, you need a break. I’ll go and take them all out in a few minutes.”

“I don’t deserve you,” she whispered into Rob’s shoulder.

He lifted her chin and leaned in, finding Karol’s lips this time. The brevity and passion of the kiss took her by surprise. Rob’s love was like that: quiet, but powerful, coming alive when she least expected it. When she most needed it. “You don’t deserve me, Kay. You deserve better.”

She slumped against him, never knowing what to say when he was like this. When life was like this. Paint rubbed off on her arm as she twined her hands behind his neck. Her eyes narrowed, first at her husband and then at the window. She’d repainted enough kid-dingy walls to know white washable paint when she saw it. This wasn’t it. It was ecru or eggshell or some other frou frou color. A color for city people who bulldozed yards and ran off friends… “Are you helping them?”

Rob didn’t answer. He shrugged instead. Inwardly, Karol did too. He could only be who he was, her husband. He didn’t know how to be anything but giving and kind.

I wish I could say the same for myself.

Right now, Karol wasn’t sure who she was. Her middle son was glad to clear that up for her.

“Mom!” A pair of hands slipped between the two of them, adhering to the front of Karol’s shirt. The very front. Though she’d weaned her son Judah years before, he still seemed to find a use for the parts which had once fed him. The current choice? Doorknobs into Mommy world. Very effective, Karol had to admit.

Rob peeled his son from Karol’s shirt and lifted him into his arms. “Judah, don’t touch your mother there, okay? And go wash your hands—”

“But Dad—”

“No buts, son. Mom and I were talking. Use your manners.” He winked at Karol and took one step before the next child, little Mia, barreled into the room, wearing her bathing suit from last summer. Hadn’t they given that to Eden, Hope’s youngest girl, before they moved away?

“Moooooom! Judah ‘it me!”

Both adults stared at the oldest brother, Ryan, who’d just entered the room, hoping for a translation of their only daughter’s language. Only he knew this latest version of Mia-latin. She removed the first consonant of all incriminating words. In this case, the first sound meant a big difference. While hitting his little sister was enough to get Judah into a mess, biting her would be even worse.

Karol rubbed her arm thinking of how bad his biting had been when he was a toddler. Hope had helped her through that too. Her middle child hadn’t bit anyone in three full years now and she prayed that losing his friends wouldn’t start him up again.

Ryan’s translation skills didn’t disappoint, but their budding young man looked plenty frustrated. Sharing a room with his little brother was ‘stagnating’ or at least that was the latest update he’d given Karol and Rob before putting his little brother’s things into the hall to make room for his books. Puberty came a lot earlier these days evidently.

“She said hit not bit. But Mom—”

A banging sound echoed from down the hall. Karol and Rob looked at each other and at Ryan with panic in their eyes. Judah unattended usually meant disaster.

Rob moved first. “Where did he go to wash his hands? Bathroom?”

Karol screamed. “Kitchen!”

If there was ever a sure way to catch up with the plumber, it was Judah alone in the kitchen. Karol picked up Mia, taking a wide step to leave room for Rob, who ran to check the bathrooms just in case Judah was clogging some fixture instead of scrambling eggs on the kitchen floor.

Just the thought of what might be happening made Karol’s heart pound. She wanted to scream at him so loud that the people next door would hear and run away screaming too. But inside her head, Hope was there, as sure as if she was sitting on that battered couch in the corner.

Man’s anger doesn’t achieve the righteousness of God, Kay. A mother’s anger doesn’t accomplish much either. You have the authority. Use it wisely. Don’t waste it screaming.

Another tear salted the corner of Karol’s eye and she rounded the corner in time to catch a glimpse of Judah’s superhero cape fluttering away from the scene of the crime. Karol tucked her daughter under one arm like a football and headed for the kitchen. Her socks glided across the laminate and into a pile of . . . hamburger, the meat for the church potluck. Rob ran into Judah in the hall and grabbed him up just as he was about to take a bite of meat that he’d taken as a souvenir.

Karol froze, unable to do anything but stare as she calculated the cost of the food her son had fed to the floor.

And just when I’d splurged on the grain fed beef too.

The perpetrator returned. “Mom! See my burger? My bur-ger!” Judah cried, wiggling in his father’s arms and pointing to the bloody mound on the floor.

Karol paused, looking into Rob’s eyes, the same eyes she’d looked into on her wedding day and she could swim in their chocolate depths forever. Back then, love meant flowers and candy. Now it meant capture and cleanup. Lines etched those eyes now and a frost of wisdom sprinkled Rob’s beard, but he’d never looked better to her.

“Do you want to deal with meat or munchkins?” he asked.

Neither. Today, just want to sit down in the corner and have a quiet talk with my friend.

Karol smiled. Outwardly anyway. The never-ending discipline that Judah seemed to require wore her out. She’d let Rob be the bad guy today. “I’ll take hamburger. And let’s blow up the pool. I know they’re used to being outside all summer. I have to go outside some time.”

Something like sunshine spread over Rob’s face. He slapped the back of her jeans. “That’s my girl.”

Judah made a gagging sound and ran ahead of his dad up the stairs. “Cover your eyes, Mia, they’re gonna kiss!”

“Ewwww!” Mia said before shielding her face from such the horror.

Ryan pulled a book from the pocket of his cargo shorts and walked away from all of them. He probably wouldn’t surface until dinner, when he’d have started another book with a similar cover—dragons and swords—but a different name. Every now and then he showed up with a book of theology or philosophy, which probably worried Karol more than the dragons. Ryan was growing up too fast. They all were. And she wasn’t keeping pace with them.

As Rob’s lips met hers in a fake kiss just to freak out the kids, Karol laughed softly. Laughing was definitely better than crying.

Rob gave her a wink that meant the real kisses would come later. She watched as he left the kitchen and started toward the stairs. He stopped halfway and turned back. “I know this is hard, Kay. But it’s going to be all right. Really. I just feel it in my gut.”

What gut? Any knowledge held in Rob’s six-pack was less than reassuring. If there’d been a feeling in Karol’s non-existent abs that might really be something. It’d be hard to locate, but it’d be something. Still, she knew he meant well and was probably right. He usually was.

“You’re right, honey,” she said, reaching for a trash bag and hoping that what he’d said was true. Anything could happen. The new neighbors might even turn out okay.

Probably not.

Not for Karol anyway. For Rob, well, everything would be fine. He’d already gotten over losing Singh as though he’d barely known the man. Sure the two of them were better about email—Hope wasn’t much of a computer person—but still the two men didn’t talk anywhere near as much as they once had. The kids still asked for Heidi-Katie-Lizzie-Tony-Aaron-Annie-Eden-and-Bone-the-dog at least once a day, but their pleas were much less urgent. They’d be fine too.

Karol might not be fine, she was starting to realize as the manic mama feelings tumbled in her stomach. There was none of Rob’s confidence to settle it. The clump of ground beef slid easily into the bag, but scrubbing the floor proved harder. Everything seemed harder. Had the past ten years been a dream? Had she ever had Hope’s consistency or Rob’s calmness? She’d thought so until the moving van took her best friend away. Could she be a good mom without Hope?

The question that sprung to her heart in response took Karol’s breath away:

The question is, can you be a good mom without Me?

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The ceiling fan whirred above Rob slowly, breathing the first breath of summer into his upstairs bedroom. Though it was only April by the calendar, summer was always a breath away in Tallahassee, drowned only by the rains that began in October and trickled through spring. The bright, hot victory of summer retaking her throne usually happened on a May morning, but on this night in late April, Rob felt the humidity that signaled the rise of the order of the sun.

Usually, he welcomed summer. It meant more time outdoors with fresh earth and the soft, brown skin of his wife and children. In the north Florida sun—which often seemed to have the red, patient glow of the peachy rays of south Georgia—nothing could be hidden or covered up. In the end, sweat and sweet tea trickled into everything, seeping between the finest fabrics, the best of plans. By summer’s end, there was never anything left unknown.

Not without a price.

As Rob slipped from his king-sized bed and stepped onto the still-cool cherry wood floor that he’d installed with his own hands, he wondered if the price would not turn out to be higher than his marriage could afford to pay.

He took the phone into the bathroom, thankful that Karol slept like a log, especially on hot nights like this with the smell of crepe myrtle syrupy and sweet in the air. For once though, he almost wished she’d wake up and overhear his conversation, saving him from being torn between his best friend…and the love of his life.

Rob’s fingers eased quickly over the phone’s keypad. Though his friend had been gone for weeks now, Singh’s cell phone number still stuck in Rob’s head like a familiar song.

Singh picked up on the first ring, probably in his bathroom too. “Hello? Rob?”

A sigh. “It’s me. Did you tell her yet? Hope, I mean?”

His friend didn’t answer which was an answer in itself.

“You’re killing me here, man. Kaye is going crazy. Today was really rough. On the kids too. Weekends are the worst. At least they have school now, but that’s only for another month and Mia’s here all the time—”

“Forgive me.”

The words made Rob swallow hard. How many times had he called this number and said the same phrase in the past ten years? He and Singh were prayer partners, accountable to one another in their walk with God, their actions as fathers and husbands. So many times they’d both fallen short of being the men they wanted to be, but one of them had always been there to hear, to believe, to pray.

When the tables turned a few years ago and Singh was the one calling Rob asking for prayer, it had been strange at first. Though theirs had been a great friendship, Rob had always felt himself to be the student and Singh the teacher. He’d had to address his own sin of holding Singh up to a standard of perfection no man could meet. It hadn’t been easy to get over though and sometimes Rob still wondered if he wasn’t harder on Singh than he might have been toward some stranger who’d walked into the men’s ministry group asking for prayer.

And yet, those two words—forgive me—reminded Rob of his own humanity and weakness. He was no better than his friend. No better at all.

Forgive me, Lord, Rob whispered in his heart. Forgive us all.

“All is forgiven, brother. I love you. I’m just worried that this is going to turn bad for both of us if we don’t do what we agreed upon. We were both supposed to tell our wives by now. True enough, you have more to tell and it won’t be easy, but we both know it has to be done.”

“Yes.”

More than a minute went by without speaking, but Rob wasn’t worried. He knew that Singh was praying. He was too.

Karol stirred in the next room.

“I’m going to have to go, man.”

“Yes. Me too. Quickly though. How is it with the neighbors? The man, Neal? I know that the girls are worried about the wife but I had a good feeling about him. Both of them. The same feeling I had when the two of you came.”

In the dark of the bathroom, Rob nodded to himself. Though the new neighbors weren’t very friendly and his wife wasn’t very fond of them, he had a feeling that somehow they would all end up as friends. What worried him was the future of their relationship with Hope and Singh.

“I hope we did the right thing.”

Singh grunted in agreement. “As do I.”

Without saying goodnight, the two men hung up and crawled back into bed with their sleeping wives.

One of them, however, was not sleeping.

From MOM’S THE WORD, by Marilynn Griffith, Steeple Hill

ISBN 0373786417, January 2009, Copyright © 2009 by Harlequin Enterprises

Limited. ® and tm are trademarks of the publisher. This edition published by

arrangement with Harlequin Books S.A.



Peace & Blessings,
Patricia
Tampa Bay Writing Examiner

Stay focused. Be deliberate. Believe.

Peace & Blessings,
Patricia

Stay focused. Be deliberate. Believe.

Friday, May 15, 2009

Not Quite 1K Per Day, Facebook...and Genesis Results

I've gotten some writing done this week. I feel pretty good about it. I definitely cannot write every single day. Because after a certain amount of writing, I need to step back and see whether the story is what I want it to be, whether it's heading in the right direction and I feel pretty good about what I've written so far.

If I had more than an hour or so a day, I could take time to do that, then write. But I don't. So some days will be writing days; others will not.

Having said that, I would still like to add 7k words per week. That would be an awesome accomplishment. We're only halfway through the month. I'm not even close to that total, but challenging myself in this way keeps me focused and moving forward so I'll keep pushing.

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I'm on Facebook now. Yes, I've bit another social networking bullet. I don't know how folks keep up with all this, but I have to admit it's fun. An old friend from high school invited me to join so I could reconnect with her and other classmates. She also invited me to join a Ning group for my hometown. I joined both, and although they are time drains, I found myself having a ball this week reconnecting with folks I haven't seen or spoken to in as much as 30 years. But I can tell you I already know I'll be backing up because one could spend her entire day "networking" and nothing else. Nuh-uh, not me!

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On another note, the finalists for the ACFW Genesis contest are out. (I'll post a link, or the list, as soon as I can.) I'm not among them. Oh well. More work to do. But I do want to give a big congratulations to one of my newer writing buddies, Jody Hedlund, who is a double finalist in the category of Historical Romance. Go, Jody, and congratulations to all of the finalists! (UPDATE: Here's the link to the finalists.

I wasn't too tuned into exactly when the finalists would be announced, the date only landing on my radar when other entrants began asking about the results on loops, but now that the finalists have been made public, I'm anxious to get my feedback back so I can see what the judges had to say.

Looking forward to the weekend...and more writing. New Examiner post, part three of "It's All About the Writing" will be up later today.

Enjoy the weekend, and come back tomorrow for some tips I've picked up this week.

Peace & Blessings,
Patricia
Tampa Bay Writing Examiner

Stay focused. Be deliberate. Believe.

Peace & Blessings,
Patricia

Stay focused. Be deliberate. Believe.

Wednesday, May 13, 2009

There's Something About May

There's something about the month of May. Still reveling in the whole motherhood thing, great weather, school's almost out, lots of family birthdays, reconnecting with old friends via a hometown Ning group...

BIG shout-out to my mother, who turns 88 today. Love you, Mommy! And another to my mom-in-law. Won't say her age because I'm not certain, but she wouldn't mind. She reads my blog so she's sure to see this. Love you too, Mom! They're both dynamite women that I've been blessed to have in my life.



Making headway on my 1k wordcount per day thing. I was a bit slow getting out of the gate, but I'm on a roll now. Yesterday I wrote longhand during my lunch hour, and transcribed in the evening. The day before, I wrote at night for about an hour.

And that seems to be about the time I need. 1 hour. In that time, I can pump out between 1000 - 1500 words, by computer or by hand. In some cases, it's more dialogue than anything; in others, I get a very solid scene.

So I'm going to try really hard to remain on this roll, and on the weekends, try to gain some of the ground I lost in the early days of the month when I was a lot less deliberate. (Sometimes I have to remind myself of my own tagline.)

What's doing with your writing?

Peace & Blessings,
Patricia
Tampa Bay Writing Examiner

Stay focused. Be deliberate. Believe.

Peace & Blessings,
Patricia

Stay focused. Be deliberate. Believe.

Monday, May 11, 2009

Motherhood and Writing

Had a wonderful Mother's Day weekend. School is wrapping up, so my oldest had an end-of-the-year pool party bash on campus. Hubby and I hung out with the two youngest, plying them with snacks while we killed time before picking big brother up and going home.

After a doctor appt. Saturday AM, they took me out for a Mother's Day weekend lunch. Sonny's Barbecue. Love the salad bar and sliced pork. Hmmm-yum! Then, we took in the National Train Day celebration and gave the kids a merry-go-ride at the mall. Finished reading one book, which I'll feature later in the week, and started another while the NBA playoffs blared from one TV and video games from another. I cooked because I wanted to. Kids love my chicken parmigiana.

Sunday AM began with Hubby-prepared breakfast, followed by church. A quiet afternoon with more NBA, more video games, and writing. Delicious leftovers for dinner so all could rest.

Monday AM and back to the routine and the unexpected, which is why I'm off before 10 o'clock to pick up middle son from school where he sits in the nurse's office with a tummy ache.

I'm working hard on Freda's story. Got two good chapters and half of a third, not counting the ones I'd written earlier and now need to incorporate. I plan to bang this out, keeping my 1k per day word count challenge in mind. I need the challenge to stay focused and get it done. Then, I'll move on to Ashley's story. The two have been warring within me so I need to get them both out as soon as possible.

Plan to have a new article up at Examiner later today. Part 2 of "It's All About The Writing."

Peace & Blessings,
Patricia
Tampa Bay Writing Examiner

Stay focused. Be deliberate. Believe.

Peace & Blessings,
Patricia

Stay focused. Be deliberate. Believe.

Saturday, May 09, 2009

Reader/Writer Tidbits -- May 9, 2009

Author Mitali Perkins asked some searing questions about race and literature in this recent article, Straight Talk on Race. Her focus was children's books, but the questions are ones that all authors, white and of color, should consider:
  1. Are the nonwhite characters too good to be true?
  2. How and why does the author define race?
  3. Is the cover art true to the story?
  4. Who are the change agents?
  5. How is beauty defined?
Amazon launched the new Kindle DX, aimed directly at college students and the e-textbook market. Never mind that most students already own laptops which include color display, while the Kindle DX only offers 16 shades of gray for a pricey $489. Will be interesting to see how this plays out in the market.

If you haven't had a chance to catch the new literary talk show, From Cover to Cover, with former television and radio news report and author ReShonda Tate Billingsley, and radio news director, former reporter, and author Pat Tucker, you're missing a treat. Each show covers a host of topics. This week's show included an interview with Bob Miller, president and publisher of Harper Collins imprint, Harper Studios, about the move from advances to profit sharing within publishing. Listen here.

This weekend is Mother's Day. I hope everyone has an opportunity to enjoy time with their mother, grandmothers, children, aunts, nieces, cousins, teachers, friends--whatever women are special in their life.



Peace & Blessings,
Patricia
Tampa Bay Writing Examiner

Stay focused. Be deliberate. Believe.

Peace & Blessings,
Patricia

Stay focused. Be deliberate. Believe.

Thursday, May 07, 2009

Featured Book: According to Their Deeds by Paul Robertson

Have a new article up on Examiner.com. I'm talking about the phases of a writing career. Phase One: It's All About the Writing.

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Today's featured book, According to Their Deeds by Paul Robertson is as close to what I would call Christian literary fiction as anything I've ever read. The voice makes me feel like I'm reading a classic; the pacing of this murder mystery reminds me of Scott Turow's Presumed Innocent. I'm about halfway through and anxious to find out "whodunnit". But I'm also savoring the language and unusual structure of this very enjoyable read.

UPDATE: I finished the book this morning, after writing the post yesterday. Definite page-turner, and already on my list of the year's best books.


This week, the

Christian Fiction Blog Alliance

is introducing

According To Their Deeds

Bethany House (March 1, 2009)

by

Paul Robertson



ABOUT THE AUTHOR:




Paul Robertson is a computer programming consultant, part-time high-school math and science teacher, and the author of The Heir. He is also a former Christian bookstore owner (for 15 years), who lives with his family in Blacksburg, Virginia.



ABOUT THE BOOK

A Deadly Game of Justice Versus Mercy Charles Beale lives outside the shadow of Washington, D.C. Politics and power matter only when a client crosses the Potomac to visit his Alexandria Rare Books shop.

But that all changes when a former client--a man deeply connected in the Justice Department--is found murdered after a break-in gone bad. When Charles reclaims at auction the books he'd once sold, he quickly discovers he's bought more trouble than he could have ever imagined.

Inside one volume are secrets. A collection of sins that, if revealed, could destroy reputations, careers--even lives. Charles soon learns he isn't the only who knows. Going to the police means ruining a multitude of lives. But staying silent puts a target on his shop, his wife--and himself. Charles must decide: Should one mistake really cost you everything?

If you would like to read the first chapter of According To Their Deeds, go HERE

Peace & Blessings,
Patricia

Stay focused. Be deliberate. Believe.

Tuesday, May 05, 2009

Changes, Changes...Writing Changes and a Challenge


First, I have five new book reviews up at FreshFiction, including Deadly Charm by Claudia Mair Burney and The Air Between Us by Deborah Johnson. Check them out via the links on the left.

Change is a-comin'...

My crit group is no more. Well, not exactly. American Christian Fiction Writers is changing it's critique format. Existing small groups like our group of six may continue or disband, but going forward, all members have the opportunity to go to a large critique group where they'll be working with a bigger and much more varied group of writers. Two crits for every one received is the new rule.

I like the idea of a large group because it takes the pressure off of having to submit on a regular schedule. Clearly, however, that's also one of the downsides. I liked the pressure as it kept me moving forward. But, the larger group may also put my work in front of some multi-published, very skilled writers from whom I hope to garner some really good feedback.

I will continue to crit with one or two of my existing crit partners because we're already well into each other's stories, and we've developed a friendship. I also value their feedback because, although we're all unpublished, we each bring different strengths to the critique table.

Our group struggled a bit with our submission schedule/rules, and with the content of the critiques as it became clear that some had more time than others and that some were more skilled in writing craft than others. We'd only been together since late January so I think we would have smoothed those things out over time.

It will be interesting to see how this larger group plays out considering folks are welcome to splinter off at any point. One thing I've learned is that, as with any group interaction, some folks just hit it off. They click; they gel. This can happen for a host of reasons: shared genre, similar craft levels, shared interests outside of writing, etc. When it happens, it adds to the critique process.

Well, I have to write something today. I joined up with two other writers, authors Samara Leigh and JC Martin, to write 1,000 words per day for the month of May. In my case, it will be more like average 1,000 words, since I definitely do not write every day. However, I will need to write more days to add 31,000 words by the end of the month to my wip. I'm gonna do it! Anyone want to join us? (We're updating daily via Twitter but hey, don't let that be a barrier. Email is good too.)

Peace & Blessings,
Patricia
Tampa Bay Writing Examiner

Stay focused. Be deliberate. Believe.

Peace & Blessings,
Patricia

Stay focused. Be deliberate. Believe.

Monday, May 04, 2009

Back to Business


Back from another beach weekend. Well, almost. I was at the beach, but not on beach.

Can't tell you which one this time but rest assured any opportunity to be close to blue waters works for me.

Mostly it was a business/fun-family weekend. Hubby had meetings; the boys and I enjoyed hanging out together in another city. Mostly stayed away from the Internet, although I'm glad I got on briefly. One of my writing buddies may have BIG news soon...

Didn't write any chapters, but did a lot of brainstorming on the first of what will now be a series of four stories. Outlined the first twenty chapters or so, which is good because it gives me direction for my writing. I already had three chapters for this character from the ensemble, but I wasn't sure where they would fit into the new story exactly. They are now chapters two, six, and nine, or something like that.

An interesting thing though as I was outlining. I became aware of the need to throw in minor incidents or connections that will tie into the future stories. Very few, and they may not mean much to the reader at the time, but will make sense as future stories unfold. Kind of like creating buried treasure.

We had such a good weekend that it was difficult to get going this morning. I told my middle son that we were "back to business", out of earshot of my oldest. Later, in the car, my oldest repeated the same phrase.

I don't want to be "back to business", not yet. Waaaah!

I love summertime, which it very much is here in FL. Can't wait for the rest of the nation to join us!

How was your weekend?

Peace & Blessings,
Patricia
Tampa Bay Writing Examiner

Stay focused. Be deliberate. Believe.

Peace & Blessings,
Patricia

Stay focused. Be deliberate. Believe.

Friday, May 01, 2009

Reader/Writer Weekend Tidbits -- May 1, 2009

A little light on the tidbits this week, but that's okay. It's May Day, which for me was always the true beginning of summer. Summer feelin' at least.

Today is the 3rd anniversary of The Wild Rose Press. They're hosting a Birthday Blog Bash and would love to have you join them.

Books are going green! The Book Industry Environmental Council is looking to reduce its greenhouse gas emissions by 20% by the year 2020.

More authors are finding success with print on demand. Be sure to hire a professional editor before going to press!

In case you need help limiting the time you use for blogging, Facebook, Twitter, etc., there's KeepMeOut.com.

And don't forget Brenda Novak's online auction to benefit Diabetes Research. It begins today!

This weekend, I hope to get a little quiet time to submerse myself in my wip. When I come up for air, I should be writing again. A little reading. Lots of family time.

Enjoy the weekend!

Peace & Blessings,
Patricia
Tampa Bay Writing Examiner

Stay focused. Be deliberate. Believe.

Peace & Blessings,
Patricia

Stay focused. Be deliberate. Believe.